#AmericaDebates

Monday’s  American Presidential debate for the 2016 election could be the potential gap closer between presidential candidates Donald Trump and Hilary Clinton. NBC News Anchor, Lester Holt will be moderating the heated debate between Clinton and Trump beginning at 9 p.m. ET.

For good reason this debate seems to be American history’s most highly anticipated debate. New polls taken by the New York times so that the competition is basically tied.

Viewers should be prepared for 90 minutes of uninterrupted, competitive bashing and thrashing between the two. The idea of “democratic” mudslinging and name calling should be enough the capture the attention of 75-80 million viewers estimated to watch worldwide. According to Quinnipiac University, the race is “too close to call” with the polls reading 47 to 46 percent working in Mrs. Clinton’s favor. Data shows that in Colorado and Pennsylvania voters with college degrees are in support of Clinton whereas those less educated are in favor of Trump.

It seems as if our potential candidates are not the only ones in heated debate about who America needs and where the country should be heading.

With the plethora of advertising on news stations and social media everywhere, let’s hope that our presidential candidates make their points as clear and transparent as the November 8th election date nears.

 

Credits:

New York Times Article

US Magazine

 

 

 

Ex-officer Kills<<< Is what I would've named this article if it were mine.

Bad lead

A former Navy reservist who was fired from the Los Angeles Police Department in 2008 has gone on a murderous rampage aimed at police officers and their families, law enforcement officials said Thursday, killing at least three people — including an 11-year veteran of the Riverside Police Department — and setting off a huge manhunt across Southern California.

My lead

Former Navy reservist kills at least three people during a murderous rampage aimed at officers and their families on Thursday. A tremendous manhunt was set in motion across Southern California after the body of of an 11-year veteran from the Riverside Police Department was discovered. The reservist was fired from Los Angeles Police Department in 2008. Was this his motivation to kill?

Why is the original a bad lead? 

The why of the article is mentioned too late in the lead. The fact that he was fired is irrelevant until the the writer states the who,what,where, when, why and how of the story. 

The Good. The Bad. The Ugly.

This is the post excerpt.

Original

1 / Natural history museums, like the American Museum, constitute one decisive means for power to de-privatize and re-publicize, if only ever so slightly, the realms of death by putting dead remains into public service as social tokens of collective life, rereading dead fossils as chronicles of life’s everlasting quest for survival, and canonizing now dead individuals as nomological emblems of still living collectives in Nature and History. An anatomo-politics of human and non-human bodies is sustained by accumulating and classifying such necroliths in the museum’s observational/expositional performances.

Rewrite

Natural history museums continue their journey to bring life to the objects and bones of dead animals and humans who once roamed the Earth. The remains are collected and reviewed in the museum’s observational/ expositional performances. These items are showcased for the humans of today educating and curating a reality that once was.

Original

2 / The visual is essentially pornographic, which is to say that it has its end in rapt, mindless fascination; thinking about its attributes becomes an adjunct to that, if it is unwilling to betray its object; while the most austere films necessarily draw their energy from the attempt to repress their own excess (rather than from the more thankless effort to discipline the viewer).

Rewrite

What you see is what you get. To dig deeper for more information is taking away the mindless fascination of what is presented. The simplest films gather its details from within. Keep it simple. Keep one source.

Original 

3 / Operationally, teaching effectiveness is measured by assessing the levels of agreement between the perceptions of instructors and students on the rated ability of specific instructional behavior attributes which were employed during course instruction. Due to the fact that instructors come from diverse backgrounds and occupy different positions within a given university, both individual and organizational based factors may contribute to the variance in levels of agreement between perceptions.

Rewrite

Coming from all walks of life, teachers bring their individual educational background and upbringings to their classrooms. This creates a varied level of understanding or agreement, if you will, between pupil and teacher.